Deon

really liked it--as a non sleeper it's a revelation

Thoughts, maybe put a little more division in the text. I also thought it was funny and you have a nice humorous style. Think about submitting to the Haven. They take all kinds of things. Put the first tag as humor. It doesnt take a lot to get top writer in humor. Also I think your punch is with "everyone does." It's ironic, maybe italisize it. Good ending. Thanks . Im going to try to go to sleep. martha